Ria ([info]kessie) wrote,
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Prince of Tennis Ficlet: "Five Minutes Early" [PG] [Ryoma; Tezuka]
Title: Five Minutes Early
Author: Ria
Disclaimer: It's not mine. Hell, a fortnight ago I didn't even think I'd be in this fandom.
Rating: PG
Warnings: Tennis.
Spoilers: Vague, vague spoiler for what happens at the end (aka: this is future-fic). Otherwise... nope.
Pairing: Vague Tezuka/Ryoma. Or Ryoma/Tezuka. Whichever. I tried my best.
Words: 750. Exactly.
Summary: It isn't the same when Ryoma comes back.
Author's Notes: For [info]bookshop because this is all her fault. ♥ Um, first fic so, uh, be careful. I haven't even half of the anime watched, so my characterisations are probably whacked, for which I apologise, but I had to get rid of the "write fic NOW!" itch somehow. They're really five connected drabbles of 150 words that somehow turned into a ficlet.


Five Minutes Early

The air smells of promise.

Ryoma jogs briskly, the familiar routine allowing his mind to wander onto more important things. Japan is the same, but not; going off to America shouldn’t make such a difference; Japan should not feel more like home considering the little time he spent here, but it does.

The familiar thump thwap of his sneakers hitting ground echoes in his mind as he paces himself, his breath coming in controlled huffs as he pushes himself, and –

There’s more than one pair of sneakers hitting ground.

He stops so suddenly that his chest tightens, but there’s no mistaking that measured, effortless stride, the brief glint of sunlight off lenses, but he’s turned a corner before Ryoma can say anything or give any reaction at all. He stares after the now long-gone jogger, eyes narrowed. Perhaps he didn’t see him; more likely he did.

“Che,” he says.

Buchou.

*

It isn’t that Ryoma actively hates his father (if having no general respect for one’s father means not hating him, especially on the days when Nanjiroh’s smile mocks more than usual), it’s that perverted tendencies and idiocy aside, Nanjiroh knows the game, and Ryoma knows a certain milestone will come when he’s won against him.

If that day ever comes, but it will; Nanjiroh knows him too well for anything else, and Ryoma knows his father better than he’d like to.

Ryoma bounces the ball slowly on the racquet, up down, up down, bounce, bounce. No determination today, no fancy techniques, nothing.

Nanjiroh has always claimed to know Ryoma too well, and Ryoma possibly believed him once, but now he wonders if he knows himself that well at all.

It’s easier that having to consider if winning Buchou’s respect is better than wiping that mocking smile off his father’s face.

*

Tennis is a reasonably simple game when one goes back to basics. Aside from the obvious idea of ‘hit the ball over the net and keep hitting it until your opponent falters’, Ryoma finds the rhythm soothing. Nothing can calm him like the repeated sound of ball hitting strings and the scuff of sneakers on the court, even when coupled with the feeling of sweat clinging to him and the usual annoyance of facing an opponent who’s underestimated him yet again.

Go a level up, and tennis is not so simple. Sets can be difficult, games long, and the sun beats down mercilessly. Opponents must be watched, never underestimated, another trick must be waiting in the back of his mind. Movements must be filtered, copied, twisted to one’s use. He can never, ever become complacent in his game, prodigy though he may be.

Nanjiroh, however, did not teach him this.

*

On Ryoma’s first day in the high school tennis club, Buchou does not say a word. His gaze lingers on him for a moment, his mouth thins a little, and then he looks away, barking for laps to be run.

Ryoma isn’t sure what he was expecting (Nanjiroh would say he expected a “Honey, I’m home!” type of welcome and Ryoma clamps down on his father’s inner voice right now), but this isn’t it. So he watches, listens, sliding easily back into the rhythm of tennis that is always familiar. Buchou is tense, unnerved even, and blatantly avoids Ryoma at every cost.

Ryoma makes a firm habit of jogging every morning, but Buchou is always a moment ahead, disappearing around the corner before Ryoma can catch up. He gives no sign or indication of ever noticing Ryoma during his morning jogs.

Ryoma decides to start his jogging five minutes earlier.

*

The air smells of promise, and Ryoma is five minutes early.

His legs move automatically as he jogs and he allows his mind to wander, listening for the tell-tell thump thwap of Buchou’s sneakers on the pavement. He doesn’t know if going five minutes earlier is too early, but he can wait. Ryoma has learned to be patient, after all.

He is early and Ryoma leans against a wall, keeping himself limber. Tennis prodigies do not remain so if they allow themselves to become complacent or out of shape, Ryoma knows, and anyway, he has to pass the time somehow.

Footfalls come closer, and Ryoma braces himself.

“Buchou,” he says, standing in his usual bored, can-we-get-on-with-it? pose as Tezuka turns the corner and stops with his usual precision.

Buchou is silent, while Ryoma smirks.

Buchou looks at him properly for the first time since Ryoma has returned, and says, “Echizen.”

END

Onwards to the sequel: Perfect Strangers.


P.S: I need to find PoT icons. Uh huh.



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[info]bookshop
2006-02-09 07:37 pm UTC (link)
omg. omg. omg omgomg. this is brilliant, and i love you, and this is just. this is *perfectly* in-character, all THREE of them, and. the insight you bring to your characterizations, this is why i have loved your writing for years, and just. GAHFLAIL. :D :D :D :D THIS TOTALLY MADE MY DAY. SO UTTERLY. And I will come back to this and leave more coherent feedback when i am not in a computer queue and my stomach is not growling. Thank you. Gah. Ria, this is gorgeous. *starry-eyed*

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[info]kessie
2006-02-09 08:00 pm UTC (link)
Eeee! Yay! I'm so glad you liked it; I was tapping F5 like a madwomen, dreading seeing, "Uh, Ria, this isn't right," or something. I kept dithering, trying to figure out if I'd got Ryoma right or not because I hadn't even see enough episodes to be sure! (I am saddened, however, by the lack of Tezuka. Must make up for that.)

I think Nanjiroh's hilarious. In a really bad way.

No, thank you for liking it! Heh, I can only go up from here. And longer, for that matter. *cackles*

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[info]bookshop
2006-02-09 08:40 pm UTC (link)

Heeee. Welllll, since you mention it *eyebrow waggle*, I would love to know what happens immediately after this. :> :> :> Tezuka can't avoid Ryoma forever. I love that he can't. Eee. LONGER LONGER MAKE IT LONGER! :D

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[info]kessie
2006-02-09 08:44 pm UTC (link)
...

*opens Word*

Slavedriver.

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[info]bookshop
2006-02-09 08:52 pm UTC (link)
*CELEBRATES!* :D :D :D

i really seriously loved this fic, the nuances, the images, Ryoma knowing Tezuka before he even sees him, because he knows him THAT WELL--knowing when and why to clamp down on the Nanjiroh-voice in his head, and. kalsjf;s;k. Absolutely wonderful.

Now give us more Tezuka. :D :D :D

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[info]kessie
2006-02-09 08:56 pm UTC (link)
I'm supposed to be writing an essay. Which I can finish at home and type up tomorrow, anyway. *shifty eyes*

Hee, thank you. I have a new fandom, wah. *cries* There's no going back! (I'm even starting to figure out this tennis thing.)

'Cause it's alllll about Tezuka. *g*

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[info]kessie
2006-02-09 10:19 pm UTC (link)
Er, the next part's got chat-logs in it.

*confused*

Oh, boy. 'S not finished yet, though.

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[info]bookshop
2006-02-09 10:26 pm UTC (link)
omg YAY *runs off to read*

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[info]bookshop
2006-02-09 10:27 pm UTC (link)

THAT IS, I WILL BE RUNNING OFF TO READ WHEN IT IS DONE. perhaps i should learn *how* to read comments to the end first. :))

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[info]kessie
2006-02-10 11:59 am UTC (link)
*dies* Haha, you were that excited? :D :D Sadly, the labs were closing so I couldn't finish it, but I printed out what I had done and wrote the rest out at home. I'll put it up once I have my essay proof-read and printed. Sadly, Tezuka and Ryoma have nothing to do with the Book of Kells - a pity, because they'd definitely make it more interesting!

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[info]kessie
2006-02-10 12:02 pm UTC (link)
Also, chat logs shouldn't be this difficult to do. Rereading your logs with Orphne is no help because there is too much capslock. No matter how I imagine it, Tezuka would not do capslock. He'd just start being all grammatically correct and get all his punctuation right and come across all cold in a chat log. DO YOU REALISE HOW HARD THIS IS?

I am out of IM practise. :(

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[info]seii_ryu
2006-02-10 12:00 am UTC (link)
Got here from your comment- I love your Nanjiroh-voice! And Ryoma is adorable. Yay!

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[info]kessie
2006-02-10 12:03 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! very much! *beams* Ryoma is, indeed, very adorable, even when he's psuedo-stalking in the form of jogging. Hey, we all need hobbies.

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[info]hemlocke
2006-02-11 04:30 am UTC (link)
I'll be honest and tell you that generally, any pairing with TEzuka doesn't really rock my boat (because I think he reproduces asexually but that's rather beside the point XD XD)

But you've portrayed the layers in their relationship well - Tezuka's reticence, Ryouma's snarkiness and more importantly, Ryouman's complex relationship with his father.

It's a good read :>

(and sorry to be all stalker-like but I'll be addingy ou to the ol' friends list if you don't mind.)

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[info]kessie
2006-02-11 11:14 am UTC (link)
See, [info]bookshop loves both Tezuka and Tezuka/Ryoma, um, A LOT and since I got into PoT through her I am very biased. I like Tezuka.... way too much. ¬_¬; The onluother pairing I can sort of see beyond this one is Tezuka/Fuji, a little cracked, but I think we can all clearly see the Tezuka bias here. *g*

Hee, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Literally, I've seen only a handful of episodes, so I was freaking out about characterisations, so... I'm just gonna go back to bribing the torrents to go faster. :D

No, thank you! I never even knew you were into PoT (some day I WILL realise that the internet is smaller than it appears)! I've friended you back, if that's okay. :)

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[info]hemlocke
2006-02-12 03:49 pm UTC (link)
I never even knew you were into PoT
Well, I like POT and adore some sections of it. It's not very obvious because I flit from fandom to fandom and all the Tenipuri I ever wrote are crossovers ^^ Slam Dunk x Tenipuri is love liek whoa. And I have Keys to the Kingdom to distract me with soon.

I like POT because it supplies me high levels of crack XD XD And your characterisation of Tezuka is not off at all because err, well, we don't get to see much else of his personality. Eh.

And sure, we can all be friends and fangirl together ^^ Thanks for friending me back :>

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[info]kessie
2006-02-13 02:04 pm UTC (link)
My sister calls me a magpie because I seem to have a new obsession every week. ^^; But there are a handful of fandoms that I consider my real ones because I keep coming back to them.

And your characterisation of Tezuka is not off at all because err, well, we don't get to see much else of his personality. Eh.

... Pfft. I shall defend Tezuka to the end! :D Hahaha.

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[info]hemlocke
2006-02-13 02:48 pm UTC (link)
I shall defend Tezuka to the end!
That's coz you've not gotten to Hyoutei yet! (Jiroh, oh Jiroh XD XD XD) Well, having said that, I adore Tachibana and he's not that much better than Tezuka. *giggles*

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[info]kessie
2006-02-13 06:05 pm UTC (link)
I seem to either go for the silent, stoic types of characters, or the crazy (sometimes murdering) ones. Tezuka, Eclipse, most of the YnM cast, Akio from Utena... I think if I actually sat down and thought about the characters I gravitate towards, I'd definitely pick up some sort of pattern. XD

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[info]hemlocke
2006-02-15 12:36 am UTC (link)
Mine's reflected in my pairings. All my friends notice that *coughs* in my het pairings at least, "the female's always the seme" and I'm like... yeah, so I like my men whipped to submission, do you have a problem with that? XD XD

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[info]venivincere
2006-02-11 02:26 pm UTC (link)
Very, very nice! I can't wait for you to write more in this fandom!

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[info]kessie
2006-02-11 02:34 pm UTC (link)
Oh, gosh, thank you very much!

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[info]aziraphale_mel
2006-02-11 03:27 pm UTC (link)
briiliant and beautiful and wonderful and lovely as;lfjkd;asfja. *hearts much*

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[info]kessie
2006-02-11 03:31 pm UTC (link)
OMG, people are actually reading this. *blank*

Um, well, thank you. *flails somewhat helplessly* ^___^

P.S.: there has been a continuation written. Just not posted yet.

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[info]aziraphale_mel
2006-02-12 02:33 pm UTC (link)
good fic naturally attracts readers, like uhhhhhhh ryoma to tezuka, whut. I AM SO GOOD AT PUNNY/ANALOGY THINGIES PRAISE ME. XP

(ooh continuation. *cackles and rubs hands in glee*)

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[info]kessie
2006-02-13 02:04 pm UTC (link)
*praises* Heeeee.

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[info]kessie
2006-02-13 02:10 pm UTC (link)
P.S.: continuation. ^__^

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[info]aziraphale_mel
2006-02-14 02:19 pm UTC (link)
:D:D:D

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[info]aziraphale_mel
2006-02-12 02:49 pm UTC (link)
and oh, may i friend you? SO AS TO KEEP UP WITH. UM. MORE HAPPY FICCAGE, WAHAHAHHA. :D

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[info]kessie
2006-02-13 02:05 pm UTC (link)
Yes, friend away! Though I am intimidated now because I fear I shall not live up to expectations in terms of fic! XD

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[info]aziraphale_mel
2006-02-14 02:17 pm UTC (link)
FEAR NOT. TRUST ME.

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[info]kessie
2006-02-14 07:32 pm UTC (link)
*dies* Thank you!

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[info]weirdlyyours
2006-02-11 08:21 pm UTC (link)
I think the fact that Ryoma is willing to drag himself up from bed 5 minutes earlier for Tezuka is TRUE LOVE. But then again, I might be completely and utterly biased.

Eeeeee this is lovely. I love the way Tezuka tries to ignore Ryoma but fails because really, who can resist Ryoma?

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[info]kessie
2006-02-11 08:38 pm UTC (link)
Of course it is true love! How cold it not be!

No one can resist Ryoma. 'Specially when he doesn't want them to! :D :D Thank you very much! I'm thrilled you liked it!

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[info]emcyclopedia
2006-02-11 10:25 pm UTC (link)
GAH.

I LOVE TEZUKA.
z0mfglkjawnef93n5qzskdjvb98&*%^ -incoherency-

My next pairing next to TezuRyo is SanaTezu... then AtoTezu... Then FujiTezu...
Gawd. I am crazy.

And I love. KEEP WRITING. -dribbles drool- *__*

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[info]kessie
2006-02-11 11:32 pm UTC (link)
Thank you very much! :)

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[info]svz_insanity
2006-02-11 10:35 pm UTC (link)
Eeeee. I love your Ryoma and his little Nanjiroh voice. And Ryoma is willing to get himself out of bed early for Tezuka! As he's an evident sleep-lover, I think that stands for itself.

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[info]kessie
2006-02-11 11:34 pm UTC (link)
Getting out of bed is the least he could do for Tezuka!

Thank you! Inner Nanjiroh voices are fun. ^_^

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[info]storyteller
2006-02-12 12:47 am UTC (link)
He can never, ever become complacent in his game, prodigy though he may be.

Nanjiroh, however, did not teach him this.


THIS IS SO PERFECT. I don't think I've read how much Tezuka changed Ryoma so aptly put in so little words.

Oh, this little ficlet has so much possibility in every word, and you've wonderfully captured Ryoma's determination to not let Tezuka deal with his feelings in the normal Tezuka way, but to confront them. ♥

*dashes off to read the sequel*

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[info]kessie
2006-02-12 01:09 am UTC (link)
Thank you very, very much! :D :D Even more meaningful because I've just seen Episodes 25/26. *beams* I'm glad you liked it!

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hi
(Anonymous)
2007-02-24 01:05 pm UTC (link)
i looking forward for the next chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!this cute.arigatou

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